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HUMOR: Words to Remember, by Darrell Lindsey
FEATURE ARTICLE, by Devyani Borade
     Launching a Blog? Start With This Checklist!
     Mixing and Matching Metaphors

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So Hard to Say Good-Bye...

When I launched Writing-World.com nearly 16 years ago (in February
2000), I never imagined it would come so far or reach so many.
Back then, my plan was to launch my own writing site, because I
knew I was about to be "let go" by Inkspot -- then, arguably, the
most popular community for writers on the Web.  Little did we
imagine that it would be Inkspot itself that was "let go," shut
down by its new owners.  On her way out (I hope she slammed the
door afterward), Debbie Ridpath Ohi redirected Inkspot's readers
to the newborn Writing-World.com.

Now it's time to close my own door, quietly, on this chapter of
my writing life and (I hope) open another.  Sixteen years ago,
launching a successful writing site was my goal and dream.  That
dream has been fulfilled.  It's time for a new one.

But I can't help lingering on the threshold to look back.  After
all, I've spent nearly 16 years writing in this space.  How better
to close than with some observations on how the writing world has
changed in that time?

We've certainly seen amazing changes in technology.  When I
launched Writing-World.com, the web was raw and new.  I gave a
seminar at a writing conference that was meant to be about how
writers could benefit from the Internet -- and ended up explaining,
instead, why a writer ought to invest in a computer!

I could spend pages talking about technological changes, but let's
cut to the chase, to the one that has had the largest impact on
writing and publishing: E-books!  The Great Debate about e-books
has been raging since Writing-World.com's beginnings.  By now,
according to many pundits of that day, print books should have
disappeared entirely! But I doubt even the most fanatical e-book
proponents could have imagined the changes wrought by Kindle.
(Back then, we were still debating the merits of Word vs. PDF!)
Print-on-demand was becoming a new reality as well, but 16 years
ago, I don't think anyone truly imagined that it would become
possible to publish AND get your book onto a major marketing
platform -- for free!

Today, forums and blogs are filled with commentary on how the
e-book (and POD) revolution has, well, "revolutionized" writing
and publishing.  We're often told that we writers now have, for
the first time, "control over our own destinies."  For many of us,
this means that, instead of struggling for two or three years to
get an agent and a publisher, and eventually earning a measly few
thousand dollars on a book that is read by tens of thousands of
people, we can get that same book published tomorrow and thank
our stars if even 100 readers come across it and we earn enough
to buy lunch.

So what HAS changed for writers in the past 16 years?  For the
better, I mean?

Insert drum roll here...

Ah... erm... really... NOTHING.

Because despite all the changes in technologies and delivery
systems, despite the fact that you could (if you wished) set your
novel to the music of a symphony of your own composing (assuming
you could in fact compose a symphony, an issue that rendered this
particular, and very real, prediction a little less popular than
anticipated), one thing has not changed.


All the fuss about getting our books onto Smartphones, or Kindles,
or iPads, or this platform or that one, makes it easy to forget
one key factor: To readers, these technologies are just new and
different ways to access what they've wanted all along.
Smartphones and Kindles simply give readers new ways to get what
they've been looking for, not just for 16 years but possibly for
1600: A good story.

Readers don't really care HOW you get your book to market.  They
care WHAT you bring to the marketplace.  And that hasn't changed.
Readers want good stories.  They want good writing.  They want
characters that they can love, or hate -- but most of all that
they'll enjoy spending time with.  Lots of time.  They want
worlds that make them wish they could pack their bags and move
in.  They want tales that feel "real" even when set in another

Readers may enjoy being able to access a book on an iPad, but
many don't actually care whether WHAT they access was written last
week or, say, in 1843.  (If you don't believe me, just scan the
listings to see how many variants on "A Christmas Carol" will be
playing on TV this holiday season!)  Our competition isn't just
the author next door or every newbie who publishes on Kindle;
it's every author who ever lived.

And that brings me to the other thing that hasn't changed in 16
years, or 160 years: the fact that there are still no shortcuts
to good writing.

The last two decades have brought us miracles in time-saving and
labor-saving devices (leaving most of us with less time and more
labor than ever).  This has led some writers to believe that
EVERYTHING ought to happen faster -- including becoming a "good"
writer.  I know of a company that sells "writing classes" that
consist of a five-minute talk designed so that you can watch it
on your phone while standing in line.

But here's the thing, the thing that hasn't changed: Some things
can't be rushed.  Just because it takes only five minutes to
microwave a bag of frozen peas doesn't mean it takes peas any less
time to GROW.  We may enjoy shortcuts that are wired into our
electronic devices, but our brains have not (yet) been rewired.
To become truly skillful and proficient at writing (or anything
else) still requires time, hard work, practice, more time,
disappointment, time, ah-ha moments, rejection, and... more time.
And hard work.  And did I mention time?

Time and hard work will not guarantee success.  The lack of them,
however, will definitely guarantee failure.  Because the thing
that really hasn't changed in 16 years is the fact that we writers
have ALWAYS been in control of our own destinies.  What we control
-- and always have -- are the choices we make, and the tools that
we use, to reach the goals that have set for ourselves, the dreams
we long to reach.  The key to controlling one's destiny is not
some new technology.  It is 1) identifying where you want to go;
2) identifying the steps that are irrevocably necessary to get
you there; and 3) taking those steps.

And that, dear readers, is one reason why I am signing off, to
buy myself some time for that hard work.  I hope that I can
follow my own advice!

As for all of you who seek to take charge of YOUR destinies and
dreams, remember that Writing-World.com is still there to help
you.  I hope it will remain a source of help and guidance for
many years to come.

And now I will say, not "good-bye," but "au revoir."  If you'd
like to remain on my "list," to get updates and notifications
about my work and the world of writing, please sign up for my
NEW mailing list at the link below.  (The old list is so full
of outdated addresses that I'm simply going to retire it.)
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And please, keep in touch! I may be closing the door on this
newsletter, but I am definitely not closing it on YOU!

A Special Word of Thanks...

The Writing World newsletter may have been my dream -- but I
didn't make it happen all by myself. I'd like to take this final
spot to thank all of the many wonderful contributors who have made
this newsletter such a wonderful resource. So many authors have
been a part of this project that there isn't space to thank them
all, but let me extend a special thanks to:

Victoria Grossack, our "Crafting Fabulous Fiction" columnist -
her work has been an inspiration to a great many of you!

Aline Lechaye, author of our "Free Stuff for Writers" columnist -
who has kept me shaking my head in amazement wondering how she
finds all this wonderful info!

Devyani Borade, who has been working quietly behind the scenes
for several months, contributing the "Write Sites" and "News"
features of the newsletter and providing an endless stream of

And last but most definitely not least, Dawn Copeman, who served
as managing editor of this newsletter for more than seven years.
Without her help (which I fear I far underestimated), this
newsletter would probably have come to an end quite a few years

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Within the virtual pages of a brand new newsletter, Debora and
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HUMOR: Words to Remember
by Darrell Lindsey

Among  all the pithy phrases
that writers have come to love
none  ever quite seem to equal
Pay To The Order Of.

Darrell Lindsey is a freelance writer from Nacogdoches, the
oldest town in Texas. His haiku and tanka have won awards in the
US, Japan, Croatia, Bulgaria, and Canada. One of his poems was
nominated for the Pushcart Prize.  He has also sold humorous
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FEATURE ARTICLE: Launching a Blog? Start With This Checklist!
by Devyani Borade

Everyone and their cat has a blog. Not all blogs last forever.
If you're serious about starting one, make sure you can answer
the following key questions:


1. Why do you want a blog?

You may want to have a blog as an online diary, to supplement
income, to vent frustrations, to offer opinions, to educate, to
encourage, to write what you like but can't sell, to promote
something (a book, article, talk or event), or to build your
writer platform. Or you may want one simply because you're bored.
Or... because everyone's doing it!

"Launching a blog successfully encompasses many factors," says
award-winning blogger and relationship columnist Jennifer Brown
Banks. "But perhaps one of the most crucial factors to consider
is the goal for blogging; don't do it simply because everybody
else is doing it. That's so 90's!

"Decide if the blog is being created for recreational purposes
or professional objectives. Is it to entertain? To educate? To
increase awareness and gain support for an important cause? To
build a writer's platform?"

Banks points out that the goal behind launching a blog will
govern the direction of the blogger, the tone of the blog, the
language, the strategy, and the topics covered. "Identifying the
central goal (and adhering to it) enables the blogger to work
smarter, not harder and have fewer detours in their journey."

2. Who will run it?

Maintaining a blog includes initial set up, regular posting,
moderating and responding to comments. Will you do it yourself
-- do you have the time, energy and inclination? Can you do it
yourself -- do you have the know-how?

3. Can you be a good employer?

If you employ another person to run your blog, can you handle
the legal, financial and regulatory requirements of being an
employer? The mental and physical rigours of being responsible
and professionally accountable for another person? Supervising
their work, dealing with ill health and holiday hiccups?

4. Why would people read posts by you/your employee?

Is it the Fun factor, the Cool factor, or the Usefulness factor?

5. Will you invite guest posts?

Guest posters bring ready-made readership, but come with a price

6. Will you accept and display advertising?

There are many forms of advertising: direct ads, affiliate links,
corporate sponsorships, etc. But securing advertising is not easy.
First advertisers need to find you. For which you need to be
successful. For which you need to be making money. For which you
need advertisers. You also need to know the going rates for blogs
in your field and keep your own rates competitive. Then you need
to give advertisers value for money -- no cheating on a few
pixels, dumping ads in an invisible location or claiming
technical difficulties during crucial business periods.

7. How will you promote it?

People need to reach your blog. Are you willing to spend money to
market it? To divert your energies from the main reason for
starting a blog?


8. What will it be about?

Banks advises that it is important to have a genuine passion for
the topic. "Without the passion, it will be very difficult to
maintain momentum and go the distance."'

Along with passion for your subject, you need clarity about its
scope and focus. Instead of a broad field like cooking, select
a niche area like festival foods, or exotic herbs, or
international recipes. But don't narrow it down so much that
you run out of things to say.

9. How will it be different from other blogs on the same topic?

Your blog needs to stand out of the crowd and be worth readers'
time. Infuse it with your voice and your perspective to keep
readers coming back for more.

10. Where will you host it?

Your own website on your own domain gives you flexibility on
design and content, but requires some technical knowledge. A
third-party website gives you less control over design but comes
equipped with all necessary tools and is easy to set up with
limited know-how.  Keep in mind that many web hosts may provide
built-in blogging tools; check with your web admin if you're
not sure.

11. What will be the type/style of posts?

Personal experience/opinion posts are easy to read, useful in
provoking discussions and generating 'buzz' and traffic. How-to
posts are great resources, offering practical take-away value,
but tend to be one-sided. Essay-type posts offer reflective/
critical analysis or examination. Cartoons, podcasts, videos,
etc. make a blog interactive and dynamic, rather than static
and one-dimensional.

12. How often will you post?

Posting on your blog is like making an appointment with your
readers. A no-show is always a disappointment. Regular posts
maintain your discipline and avoid surprises for readers. Choose
a comfortable frequency, but once established, stick to it
consistently and with commitment.

13. How will you ensure you have content that can sustain the
momentum for many years?

The strongest enthusiasm will fizzle out eventually. Ensure you
have a strategy for those times when the creative juices are
flowing sluggishly or you don't have enough to write about or
life gets in the way.

14. Will you use images? Where will you source these from?

Blogs without pictures are dull. But don't rip off photographs
from the Internet. Budget for them. Either get an amateur
photographer friend to help out or buy from iStockPhoto.com,
Fotolia.com, etc.

15. What will you call it?

A blog needs a name suitable to its theme, tone and style. Your
blog name will spearhead your "brand" identity, make it memorable
and hook readers into visiting it. Keep it reasonably short,
punchy and unambiguous. A name like "Banana Party" doesn't tell
readers whether it is a serious resource about bananas, the fruit
or a whacky one about bananas, the madness.

16. How long will posts be?

They should be as long as required, but roughly the same length.
Too long, and the message will be truncated and lost. Too short,
and vital points can be missed. Blog posts are often cross-
referenced over the Internet via email, shared over Facebook,
retweeted via Twitter, etc. Remember: the title of the post
forms part of the "permalink" of that post, the permanent URL
that gets assigned to the post for reference after it goes into
archives. If your title is too long, it may create a convoluted
web address that is difficult to hyperlink and share.

17. What will the design and layout be?

To make a good first impression, make sure your blog isn't too
"busy." Leave plenty of white space. Use fonts, colours and
contrasts that are easy to see and pleasing to the eye. Keep
less able users in mind and steer clear of seizure-inducing
flashing effects, fast-moving marquees or elusive page jumps.

Designing your blog in keeping with your existing website
branding builds upon recognition, familiarity and trust.
Conversely, making it over in a completely different fashion
can bring a breath of fresh air and vibrancy.

18. Will you link with Analytics?

You'll be curious about how many visitors your blog gets every
day, where in the world your readers live, which referring
websites most of your traffic comes from, which of your posts
are most popular, which ads are getting the most clicks, etc.
You'll also want to ensure that anyone with any operating
system and using any web browser or mobile phone can view the
posts correctly, that the page performance is quick and doesn't
keep readers waiting, hyperlinks are not broken, bread crumb
trails are not dead, and robot files can search through your
post directory. This means analysing your blog data by linking
it to web analysis tools like Google Analytics, Omniture, etc.
Can you keep up with technical nitty-gritties like page loading
times, Search Engine Optimisation (SEO) techniques, click-
throughs and conversion rates?

19. When will you end it?

Everything that starts must come to an end. Your blog is likely
to come to an end when your main aim of starting it is met.
Which is why it is very important to have a solid answer for
question #1.

Blogs can keep your free hours occupied, hone your writing
skills and perhaps even become the foundation of a career. Blogs
can be fun.

For the serious punter, blogs can be a great way to connect
with readers, establish your credentials, build a list of
publication credits, keep your finger on the pulse, or simply
entertain and share your passion with others. Being the proud
owner of a blog comes with its highs and lows. You may find
yourself without an audience. You may find that people abuse
and mock you. You may find that you don't have much to write
about. Or you may find yourself beating off advertisers with a
stick. You may find an agent, a publisher and a six-figure
three-book deal within a year. You may even find a new purpose
to life.

Devyani Borade writes for magazines across the world. She has
successfully negotiated higher payment rates for the majority
of her articles and stories, and survived to continue writing.
Visit her website Verbolatry at http://devyaniborade.blogspot.com
to contact her and read some of her other work.

Copyright 2015 Devyani Borade

This article may not be reprinted without the author's written permission.

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CRAFTING FABULOUS FICTION: Mixing and Matching Metaphors
by Victoria Grossack

In this column we will review metaphors, which can enrich and
enhance your story.  First we will consider definitions, then
review examples from literature, then discuss techniques for
creating your own.  We'll also take a look at mixed metaphors
and give examples of when they can be bad, or good, depending
on what you are trying to achieve.

What are metaphors?  The word "metaphor" is used two different
ways, the first definition strictly grammatical, the second
definition far more broad:

In Wikipedia we find a precise definition:

A METAPHOR is a figure of speech that identifies something as
being the same as some unrelated thing for rhetorical effect,
thus highlighting the similarities between the two. It is
therefore considered more rhetorically powerful than a simile.
While a simile compares two items, a metaphor may compare or
directly equates them, and so does not necessarily apply any
distancing words of comparison, such as "like" or "as."  A
metaphor is a type of analogy and is closely related to other
rhetorical figures of speech which achieve their effects via
association, comparison or resemblance -- including allegory,
hyperbole, and simile.

The most common example of a metaphor that I have found meeting
this strict definition is: "All the world's a stage and all the
men and women merely players" (Shakespeare, "As You Like It").
Notice how Shakespeare equates "world" and "stage" without use
of the word "like."

The second definition given at Merriam-Webster is:

   an object, activity, or idea treated as a metaphor: symbol.

In this column, we will be working with the second, much broader
definition, as the boundaries are blurry and because many of the
principles used in creating a simile or an analogy can be used
to create a metaphor.  So, a warning: don't use this article to
study for an examination on English grammar.  Use it, if you do,
for coming up with symbols for your story.

Examples of Uses of Metaphors
A picture is worth a thousand words, and examples serve the
same purpose.

TITLES.  Metaphors are used frequently for titles, such as the
novel, "A Tree Grows in Brooklyn" by Betty Smith.  I read this
book when I was a kid and I admit that at that point I did not
understand the point of the title.  Only recently, when I thought
about it again, did I realize that the main character, Francie
Nolan, was the tree -- she was rooted in one spot; she was
sturdy and strong; she offered shelter and a place to roost for
all the flighty members of her family.

FORESHADOWING.  In Daphne du Maurier's "Rebecca," when the
nameless narrator receives an offer of marriage from the handsome,
sophisticated, older, wealthy Maximilian de Winter -- something
that seems more wonderful than her wildest dream, so incredible
that at first she does not even believe him -- she is eating a
piece of fruit.  The fruit, sweet at first, turns out to be
sour, which obviously foreshadows how their lives together will
play out.  It looks pretty and sweet from the outside, but the
actual relationship contains unpleasant surprises.

SYMBOL OF A CHARACTER.  A metaphor may represent a character or
some aspect of that character.  Satan is often represented by a
snake or a serpent, and is supposed to be twisted or slithery.
Spirits and souls are often represented by birds.  In the New
Testament, the Holy Spirit visits Jesus in the form of a dove.

In David Eddings's "The Belgariad," he calls Silk rat-faced all
the time, and gives that character some of the qualities of a
rat.  In "The Iliad," Hector, prince of Troy, is usually
mentioned at the same time as his shiny helmet.  In both these
cases the rat-faced and the shiny helmet also serve as character
tags, to help the reader (listener) or the writer (reciter)
remember who exactly the character is, as both epics contain
casts of thousands (well, many, many characters). But the
symbols do more than that.  Silk has rat-like qualities.
Hector's gleaming helmet shows that he is a warrior, and the
brightest hope of the Trojans.

THE MOOD OF A STORY.  In Jane Austen's "Emma," when the outlook
for the character seems particularly bleak -- Emma has realized
that she has been in love with George Knightley for a long time
just when it seems extremely unlikely that he will ever return
that affection (in fact he has reason to despise her) -- the
weather echoes her mood.  Then the weather improves and so does
her future with Mr. Knightley.

THE WHOLE STORY.  In Oscar Wilde's "The Portrait of Dorian Grey,"
the subject of the painting -- the man -- remains young and
beautiful, while his portrait acquires the ugliness of his sins.

POETRY.  Metaphors are used all the time in poetry.  I am not
a poet; poetry intimidates me, so I will only mention it.

Metaphors that Match
So, now that we have seen some examples of metaphors in famous
stories, how do you go about creating your own?

Think of an emotion, idea or character that you want to enhance
with a metaphor, such as disgust, anger, hope, treachery,
madness, confusion or reliability.

Consider what is in the setting of your story, such as the
animals, food, furniture, technology, weather.  Is there
something that could do a good job of representing an emotion,
an idea or a character?  For example, if you were combining
animals with some of the ideas above, you could use cockroaches
to symbolize disgust, a bull to represent anger, or a dog to
convey reliability.

You can strengthen the metaphor by including adjectives to
increase its particularity or doing something with it.  A dog
may convey reliability, but a faithful dog conveys the concept
better.  If you want to signal that something bad will happen
to your characters, then you can have something bad happen
with the symbols representing them.

Perhaps you are writing about a chair for your protagonist.  It
could be faded.  Comfortable.  Lumpy or hard.  Too large or too
small.  Perhaps it squeaks when she sits in it.  Perhaps it is
infested with mites.  Perhaps it breaks when your hero sits on
it.  Perhaps it is new, or antique, cheap, or expensive.  Any
of these attributes can enhance your metaphor.  With a little
effort you can find the metaphor that matches your story

And of course, not everything needs to be metaphorical.  You can
simply write that Henrietta sat down on the chair and not worry
about it.  As Sigmund Freud (allegedly) said, sometimes a cigar
is just a cigar.

Mixing Metaphors
Sometimes more than one metaphor applies.  A villain could have
both snake-like and spider-like qualities, but generally they
should not be mixed, as spiders don't slither and snakes don't
build webs.  Yet it is easy to mix metaphors; that is, to begin
by using one but then to move on to use another.  Sometimes this
is deliberate; sometimes it is a misunderstanding of the original
phrase; frequently it is just due to the human brain, making
connections and combining ideas when you would rather it did not.
Here are some examples and some thoughts on why they do, or do
not work.

mixing the sayings "until we turn blue" and "until the cows come
home".  The problem is that cows never turn blue.  At least I
have never seen a blue cow (nor a purple cow, for that matter).

HE WAS WATCHING ME LIKE I WAS A HAWK.  Normally hawks do the
watching and the proper version of this is "like a hawk".
However, there are circumstances where someone might observe
a hawk -- if that someone were a mouse or a dedicated
birdwatcher, watching a hawk would make sense.

A WOLF IN CHEAP CLOTHING.  The traditional expression is "a wolf
in sheep's clothing," meaning someone who pretends to be harmless
but who is dangerous, with a hidden and often lethal agenda.
This could be said by someone who had misheard the original
phrase.  However, a wolf in cheap clothing is actually
possible: one could imagine a dangerous person dressed badly.

Mixed metaphors can be simple mistakes that you wish to avoid.
Another option is to give them to one of your characters, to
add some flavor or distinction to his or her voice.  Another
way to use them is in the third example, in which you are
playing with the words, using the cheap clothing deliberately.

Conclusion and Caveats
How much metaphor to include in your story is an artistic decision.
However, be warned that not all your readers will "get" your
metaphors the first time they read your story.  Perhaps they will
pick up on the meanings when they re-read it, or when they write
an essay about your book.  Perhaps comprehension will come
decades later, as it did for me and "A Tree Grows in Brooklyn."
Again, if you are studying for a test, please memorize and
utilize the definitions given by your instructor.

Finally, a few last words.  Moira Allen has decided to stop
issuing this newsletter, and hence the "Crafting Fabulous
Fiction" column will also cease.  Working with Moira has been
an absolute joy.  She also showed me that there are some people
out there in the writing world (pun intended!) who combine the
characteristics of intelligence, integrity, competence,
generosity and sheer niceness.

I also want to thank all the readers who have taken the time
to plow through my columns, especially those who were kind
enough to send me affirming feedback.  If you want to reach
me at some point during the future, you should be able to do
it via my website, http://www.tapestryofbronze.com.

Keep on writing!





Victoria Grossack studied Creative Writing and English Literature
at Dartmouth College, and has published stories and articles in
such publications as Contingencies, Women's World and I Love Cats.
She is the author of Crafting Fabulous Fiction, a step-by-step
guide to developing and polishing novels and short stories that
includes many of her beloved columns. With Alice Underwood, she
co-authors the Tapestry of Bronze series (including Jocasta,
Mother-Wife of Oedipus; The Children of Tantalus; and Antigone &
Creon), based on Greek myths and set in the late Bronze Age. Her
independent novels include The Highbury Murders, in which she does
her best to channel the spirits and styles of Jane Austen and
Agatha Christie, and Academic Assassination (A Zofia Martin
Mystery). Victoria is married with kids, and (though American)
spends much of her time in Europe. Her hobbies include gardening,
hiking, bird-watching and tutoring mathematics. Visit her website
at http://www.tapestryofbronze.com, or contact her at tapestry (at)
tapestryofbronze (dot) com.


Copyright 2015 Victoria Grossack

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